When doing my Music video pitch, you could say that the nerves got the best of me, hence the fact i stuttered and made silly grammar errors when doing it, this also brings me to my next point. I didn't refer back to any terminology such as Andrew Goodwin or his ideas, Perhaps if i had done this, I could of been a bit more descriptive of what i was talking about. Also with this i could of bonded it along side my own idea of my music video.
One thing i was pleased about, was that i knew exactly what i wanted my idea to look like, i was also happy that i wasn't focused on just one point in the room, and i gave everyone eye contact when speaking. i was also pleased about giving everyone hand gestures of what i was talking about.
The Improvements that the audience had set me was to think about time and cost of the locations that i wanted to go to. And i also noticed that people had difficulties understanding what i was talking about so i am thinking of possibly changing thew story slightly so it makes it more original so its easier to understand.